DWRI0091

2/17/09

Ms.Jones

Tspr Pages 40-48

1. She didn’t go to school to writ or learn English. A scholar went to school learn how to writ. A writer for the love to tell people about stories, or life lessons
2.  She gets what other people are saying in there way they talk. Evoke an emotion, a visual image, complex idea or a simple truth.
3. Her mother was in the room her mother never heard her speak like that. When she is around her mother she talk the way her mother talks.
4. She has to learn to talk to different people different way. Yes like from the heart  she writ her stories to make it so every one can enjoy it , and under stand what its saying
5. So you where she is coming from.
6. Tan’s mother does every day thing in her own English. Her mother speaks the way tan under stand it she sees the scene that she is describing.
7. She acts like some thing is wrong with the way she talks but there nothing wrong. Like an American.
8. She does not know what he is talking about. There the one that don’t know what there talking about because tans mother is a very smart lady.
9. She’s the one talking acting like her mother and her mothers yelling in her ear telling her what to say to the people on the phone.
10.  Her math score where high and she thought her mother English was high. She was raised to do math and English was her second thing she learned.
11.  She’s showing every one where she’s coming from. It does not tell what’s she’s talking about. That she it able to go back and forth and talk in different ways.
12. She does not what to writ hard stories she what people to enjoy her writings. Make it easy like her mother to read. Basic word a story line that you can fallow and keep the reader in the story.

DWRI 0091

Ms. Jones

2/17/09

TSPR pages 55-72

When I was 13 years old I always wanted to play pro football, I didn’t care if I played for the worst team I want to play football. I grow up watching these great athletes I want to be them. I read book about john Elway and how he grew up. I did every thing that athlete did eat like them, dress like them, worked out like them and wore there jersey. Once I got older and I realized that I’m not going to be six foot five and I’m  not that big to play pro football, I was ok with that.

            My dad is a very don’t to earth man. He never gets out of his mind like what if or if this happened. My dad keeps his mind out of the clouds and focus on what he has to do that day. Some time it ok today dream and relax, and say what if. I had a dream to became a pro football player I work to that dream and realized im not that big I had a great career, but im ready to start realistic dream ahead of me.

2/12/08

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Ms.Jones

Description Essay  TSPR page 51

When I was in 8^th grade I was a shame of my little bother. When he was young he liked cartoons he dressed wears and said stuff that where a little weird to. I did not like take my bother places with me, because I did not want people to know that was my brother. Now today my brother and I am best friend. I, am now not a shame to take my bother out with me.

2/10/09

Dwri0091

Mrs.jones

Dream Deferred

The Theme of the story it’s asking the reader to what happens to deferred dreams. It list thing that my happen to it.

The voice of the poem is asking wondering. Seeing what other people thought about what happened to dream deferred

The Imagery describing what it feels like or what it looks like or how it would taste.
 

2/4/09

Dwri 0091 TTR 1230 150

Mrs. Jones

President Barack Obama Inauguration Day 2009

The Inauguration has changed over the hundred years. On Tuesday, January 20, 2009 the first in America’s history African American President was sworn in.  President Obama give the united State the hope to go after there dreams that they never thought the could achieve. On Inauguration day you saw two million people cram packed, shoulder to shoulder in the national mall and also along Pennsylvania Avenue all from a different race and religion, Obama is bring America together. It was amazing day January 20 watching President Obama get sworn in, I have faith that Obama will put the united State back where we need to be.

            President Obama is bring the country together, we weren’t whites, black and Asians but we where Americans that day. President Obama can only do so much as American we have to work together to put The united state back where it need to be .If we are going to get back on track all Americans have to back President Obama idea up.  We as American need to throw out the race and religion out the window its us thats going to fix the government. President Obama going to make every one come together as American work as one for the better.

            Obama has his hands full as he steps in as President, But he has big dreams to turn around the United States. Getting out of this slump, create jobs for people that need them the most. We have been down before but not like this President Obama is the one that well get us back on track. When we are back on track, we are the countries that well help the countries that need the help the most. President Obama is the one to get us out of this slump, I hope it well happen fast.

            He has given everyone in this great country a dream, to get that dream you have no matter what. It does not matter what color you are get after it ,and go get what you wanted. He showen us that, don’t let people say no, don’t let them affect  you to reach your dream. Like Barack, see your dream and work hard to get that goal and never quit. President Obama gave us the dream if he can do it, why not us set your goal and achieve it.

            Obama has given me, the United States and the Whole world dreams.  President Obama has dreams for the United as well. Barack Has put the United States back as the melting pot again. President Obama Achieved his goal as being the first African American president on January 20. I hope he will achieve all the goals he has for the United States,and put us back on track.

           

Sources

 http://www.telegraph.co.uk/finance/comment/ambroseevans_pritchard/3387659/Obama-will-bring-step-change-to-US-economic-policy.html

http://www.washingtonpost.com/wp-dyn/content/article/2008/11/29/AR2008112901912.html

http://www.abc.net.au/news/stories/2008/11/06/2411529.htm

Critique

Strengths: make my sentences sound more interesting. Putting valid points in my paragraphs like in paragraphs 1 and 2.

Weakness: Blending Paragraphs together to be smooth like in all my body paragraphs.

Building paragraphs so the read knows what my point is like In paragraph 4.

                        Brain Storm

                                                       usa                                                                                 Hope                 

                                                                                                                                                Safety

                                    President Barack Obama Inauguration Day 2009

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                               Faith

                                                                                                                        Color

                       Togetherness